A Matter of Semantics
The assignment was, is: Do a short piece of Erotica from the point of view of the opposite sex … in the first person. ( Opposite of yours, the writer’s. ) A simple enough exercise … one would think.
erot·ic (ē rät′ik, i-)
- of or arousing sexual feelings or desires; having to do with sexual love; amatory
- highly susceptible to sexual stimulation
Origin: Gr erōtikos < erōs (gen. erōtos), love
an erotic person
Can we, as writers, do it? Do women write better doing males in the first person, or do men do it better? Even just a couple of paragraphs.
He seduced me on a late fall Saturday night. I have to admit to being a willing participant.
I had been prepared to wait. Good girls don’t do it we had always been told back home … until they are married. Or at least engaged. And, it wasn’t our mamas who told us that last part.
Music played on the radio, and the intermittent voice of the announcer.
“Dance with me,” he pulled me up from the cushioned sofa.
I kicked off my shoes, the crown of my head fit perfectly just underneath his chin. He was warm against my chest
We didn’t dance much. Mostly he just kissed me, me on tip toes.
“Did I tell you you kiss good?” I asked.
“You did. Do it again.”
“Tell you you kiss good?”
“No. … Kiss me again.”
I did. He held a handful of the back of my skirt in one hand.
The pronouns are easy. However, do the above paragraphs flow? If you stop and think about it, is that the voice of a female?
The results were, in my opinion, mixed. There are eight writers in this particular group, five women and three guys. I thought three of the five ladies pulled it off. If I had been doing a ‘blind’ reading it would never have crossed my mind a man didn’t write this … it doesn’t sound right. Of the other two men in the group, I thought it was one and one as far as being convincing is concerned.
Give it a try! … Maybe we’ll have a contest.